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Hello gang,
Fly? what he is doing there? smells like danger…
I’m sorry for the delay, personal matters. Also, I’m sorry for saying this again but I have to continue encourage you to sign up the mailing list so you can receive a sneak peek of the concept art book of Tinkers of the Wasteland.
On the other hand, Tinkers is almost finishing. April 2nd is the estimate date! What it’s coming next is: A lot of work. I’m planning to draw around 10 new pages to complement the beginning What? more pages? this is madness. Also, I need to prepare the comic to be printed in order to keep my word for those who supported me in my webcomic camping. It’s gonna be black and white and as thick as an AKIRA manga book. So little by little it’s gonna be accomplished. I’m a multitask guy but be patient.
Watch out with the hungry mutated gorillas out there looking for their bananas.
Raul
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Damn it! This story is getting amazing. I would even want to play an RPG-alike videogame with this plot and title, hahaha. Great work!
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Fly? I’ve been waiting for him to show up again! Can’t help but wonder what his place is in all of this…
Panel Three – “That was the bad news.” “However, we just bumped off one of them…”
Last panel – where did Dr. Deb’s “tin ears” go? For that matter, does he have one or two? That seems to be subject to change (and one looks more like an electronic megaphone than a tin ear – second-from-last panel, on his right shoulder…)
To quote the Grateful Dead – “What a long, strange trip it’s been!” (And it ain’t over yet, is it?)
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Raul Trevino Reply:
March 15th, 2013 at 12:54 pm
Thanks for all your notes. I added the “tin ears” already. I missed them in the last panel. He just have one in his left ear, and the other one is a speaker ‘coz he speaks low.
An yeah, it hasn’t over it yet. Treat or not, the chikrons are gonna be part of the wastelands. This loooong arc just set up a kinda of mythology. The following arcs are not gonna be necessarily about the chikrons, but other adventures. Tinkers webcomic is more like ongoing series rather than a one shot story.
Thank for commenting. 
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Page 1, panel 3: “more massive” sounds weird to native English speakers. It could be replaced with “massively increased” or simply “massive”
Page 1, panel 3: “We just bumped one of them off, and it was hard.” Bumped off implies a death easily accomplished. (A little bump off the edge and he fell to his death.) To emphasize the difficulty, you could say “We killed just one of them, and even then it was hard.”
Page 1, panel 5: “No, no my fiery girl” needs another comma after the second no, and fiery girl is an unusual expression in English. I suggest “No, no, my little spitfire.” (http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/spitfire?s=t)
Page 2, panel 5: “So you want to be a fire extinguisher between these two, uh?” seems to be an awkward turn of phrase in English. Also, uh? should be huh? or eh? (I prefer eh? because it is more old-fashioned in American English, as well as it having more association with the users of ear trumpets in old movies.) Maybe “So you want to continue extinguishing your friends’ flare-ups, eh?”
Page 2, panel 5: “You guys are always welcome to my bunker” should be “You guys are always welcome _at_ my bunker.”
Page 2, panel 6: “now but the good news are” should be “now, but the good news _is_.” (also, please note the comma between now and but)
Also, I am impressed that you used complement correctly. Even native English speakers commonly confuse it with compliment.
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Raul Trevino Reply:
March 13th, 2013 at 9:33 pm
Thank you, Pedro. That would be GREAT!!!!!!
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Nathan Reply:
March 20th, 2013 at 8:35 pm
Maybe someone could make a custom Tinkers mod for Wasteland 2 when it comes out. (http://www.kickstarter.com/projects/inxile/wasteland-2)
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