Pages 425 and 426
Hello gang,
Here again with another update. What’s happening with Chapi? Why Splitter and Milla cannot get along well for once? well, relationships are complex and our minds as well.
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15 Comments
you art is just awesome, can you please draw a hentai?
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Wonderful art as usual. Just wondering, is English your second language? If it is you still have better grammar than most English speakers I know. Also two grammar mistakes: #1 Page 425 panel 2- The second sentence shouldn’t start with “and” and “die” should be “died” #2 426 last panel- “It’s!” doesn’t make sense in that context. It should be “It is!”
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Raul Trevino Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 10:42 pm
Hello Daniel,
I’m sorry for the delay.
Well, not exactly. I’ve been studying english in Mexico because it’s something parents advise us to learn since we’re children. So in one way or another I’ve always practicing english. Great that my english is getting better while I’m enjoying doing Tinkers.
On the other hand, the corrections you suggested are made. Click refresh to the changes.
Thanks a lot.
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One final grammar note to add onto what Daniel mentioned: On page 425 panel 3, it should be “don’t LOSE the enthusiasm” not LOSS.
Great comic! Thanks for creating!
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Panel two – excellent rendition of expression! I can almost hear Milla and Splitter whistling tunelessly to try to dissociate themselves from what Chapi is saying.
Panel three – two items:
1) You can’t cheat destiny. As I heard it, “You can’t kill a man who is born to hang.” Same theory!
2) “Don’t LOSE that enthusiasm.”
Panel six: I’m assuming that’s meant to be “bicycle” instead of “bycle?”
Panel seven: “… to use THE battery …”
These pages, tho, just hit me as being full of WIN. Keep it up!
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Raul Trevino Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 10:50 pm
Cool, I fixed it and you can click refresh to see the changes.
Thanks, Kelley. I’m glad you liked it.
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JKelley Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 10:59 pm
Cool – glad to help!
Writing fiction is actually a good way to improve language skills, if you can get friendly critiques (as you seem to here.)
After all, I didn’t really learn to type until writing my second book…
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Raul Trevino Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 11:04 pm
Oh, Do you write books? It sounds fun. I’ve always wanted to write one. Yeah, guys around here are really nice. Thanks for helping me!
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JKelley Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 11:10 pm
Yah – I’m working on my second, third, and fourth technical books (automotive,) I’m writing a sort of “handbook for caretakers” (which I won’t sell – I’ll give that one away. Any outfit I give it to will be specifically forbidden from selling it as well,) and I’ve surprised myself by starting a novel a couple of months ago (I used to really suck at fiction, so I never thought I’d have started one. But, one night, I had a dream that hurt my MIND – my wife told me to write it down so we could talk about it. She said it would probably make a good novel, after she read it…)
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Raul Trevino Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 11:43 pm
Great that you have your hand on work.
Definitely literature is something I’d like to explore.
Mostly from dreams come great ideas. Amazon looks to be a great platform to build an independent author career. Good look with that.
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Raul Trevino Reply:
January 29th, 2013 at 8:11 pm
Hello!
Well, one of my past projects was to make a hentai manga working with Toshio Maeda, but it wasn’t a good timing and the project stopped. I hope one day we can make one. Thanks for your comment.
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JKelley Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 11:12 pm
Perhaps something in the vein of “Xxxenophile,” by Phil Foglio? Not really “hentai,” but it’s about the best erotic comic series I’ve ever read! Digging around should turn it up, I’d like to see the Foglios pick it back up someday…
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Raul Trevino Reply:
February 6th, 2013 at 11:18 pm
Oh, I google it and I found nice art behind those names. Thanks for mention it, Kelley. I didn’t know about him.
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