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I’m sorry for the daly guys, here it is!

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awww, now thats just not nice, I hope they make up soon :(
Great work on the story so far, I’m really into it, can’t wait for the next update. ^^

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It’s because of her ‘odor’ why he want to leave her, right? But the odor of a loo isn’t so much better (I presume)…

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What the fuck, Splitter?

I’d murder to have a girlfriend like Milla and your hiding in a toilet to keep Milla away?

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Raul Trevino Reply:

I know, Splitter is really stupid …

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hhmmmm, it feels like theres a comic missing between these two. . . it seems like every one was in awe of what just happened, then suddenly splitter as at her throat again.

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Raul Trevino Reply:

Agree, I felt the same after finish them. Maybe if we add “by the way,” in the first Splitter’s dialogue will fix it?

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Raul Trevino Reply:

I made an edition at the top of the page … I think works better.

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ooh, looks like you made a little edition to the top of the page, I like it. Makes it blend more with what happened last page, instead of Splitter randomly snapping at Milla (even though that’s technically what he is doing :/).

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Raul Trevino Reply:

Yeah, I did it. It works better I think. :D

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Hmm. “By the way” doesn’t work for me, it is a very casual thing to say, not angry. I see why you added it but maybe “Hey” or “Wait a minute” would work better to indicate angrily changing the topic.

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